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DEVELOPMENT OF PAGE 14
Rob Hughes: Script ~ Michael Kaluta: Layout ~ Thomas Yeates: Pencils and Inks
Colors by Thomas Yeates and Lori Almeida ~ Letters by Steve Dutro
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Kaluta Layout and Notes
Yeates Pencil Sketch
Michael Kaluta's Notes for Page 14
Pnl 1: (I think there should be some sort of transitional word balloon 
that leads to this panel's action...)
Pnl 2:  I suggest using only the first word balloon in this panel, 
the second, though the tail; goes to Richard, the balloon overlaps the next panel
Pnl 3: Might move the figures a bit Left so the balloon will fit on the right bottom
Pnl 4: I could see this as a series of silhouettes with the word balloon 
coming from the third Simon...
Pnl 5...
Pnl 6...		 .
ROB HUGHES ADAPTATION AND SCRIPT
PAGE 14
Panel 1
Simon takes a combat stance.
SIMON: By God, enough somberness. Time for swordplay.
(2nd balloon): En Garde!

Panel 2
Young Richard, pulling out his small wooden sword, runs toward his uncle who is pretending to be unable to withdraw his own sword from its scabbard.
SIMON: A moment, brave prince. My sword will not unsheathe.
YOUNG PRINCE RICHARD: That’s your problem.

Panel 3 
Young Richard swings at Simon.
SIMON: Oh!
(2nd balloon): The spirit of chivalry at its apex, I see!

Panels 4-5
With his soldier’s reflexes, Simon easily dodges the boy’s simple thrusts and swings.

Panel 6
One more thrust and Simon catches the wooden sword in his armpit.
SIMON: Alas! Ye have finally bested me.
(2nd balloon): A very fine swordsman you have become.

Panel 7
The great Earl drops to his knees as if mortally wounded. 
Simon hunches over and drops his head. Young Richard steps closer, concerned for his fallen opponent.

Panel 8
Simon suddenly flings his eyes wide open, rears up on his knees, and grabbing the startled boy, begins to tickle him.
Richard struggles and giggles with glee. It’s a game they have played before.
SIMON: Ah Ha!
(2nd balloon): I have you now my young prince, and I’m not letting go!
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Yeates B/W
Yeates Colour
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